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About this Sample Resume Critique
In this sample resume critique, the certified professional resume writer at
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the process of creating the client's "after" resume from the client's "before" resume.
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both the "before" and "after"
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Sample Resume Critique
Dear Adam ~
Thank you for submitting so much information by email and phone.
For your resume, I chose a "Traditional" format to best display
your skills. This format employs the Times New Roman font resulting
in a document that is elegant and uncluttered with plenty of white
space.
While most med school resumes are one-page, I created yours at
two because of your extensive and varied skills. I believe each
of your jobs will impress an admissions director, as they are indicative
of your dedication and determination.
To begin the resume, I wrote a Qualifications section that briefly
summarizes and emphasizes those areas in your present and past
that I felt would most interest an admissions director. I began
by calling you a "Graduate Candidate,"
then went on to state your interest in medical school ".for future
work in international and relief assistance, a passion partly realized
through volunteer efforts."
Next, I brought in your lab skills, research, data collection,
and the like, and then stated that you are currently enrolled in
a pre-med program. For the next skill set, I chose to emphasize
your linguistic capabilities that include ".fluency in English,
Japanese, and Thai." If you have further language skills, I could
add those to this section. I ended this paragraph by writing of
your travels abroad.
For the next section, I listed your Education, but did leave out
your explanation about working toward a BS in Biology. I felt that
would be better stated in a cover letter, rather than a resume.
I also excluded "The Colorado School," information you provided
as US resumes don't generally list high school
The "Professional Experience" section is next. Here, I separated
your duties from your accomplishments, making certain that each
job listing had at least one accomplishment. This provides consistency
to the document. In some of your explanations on ResumeRite, you
were a bit too thorough, which of course is a good thing for the
purposes of ResumeRite.
For example, you wrote:
"Collect data (young subjects - 5 years old - come in with parents
for electroencephalographic analysis of visual cortex.procedures
takes 1 hr and involves technical and personal skill with young
subject and parents)."
I revised that to read:
"Perform electroencephalographic analysis of visual cortex on
five-year-old patients to collect data." (I included only that
data I felt an admissions director would need to know).
In another example, you wrote:
"Produced THE prototype for a GPS-managed digital travel guide."
I revised that to read:
"Produced prototype for a GPS-managed digital travel guide that
has become the industry standard."
I ended your resume with the "Volunteer Activities" section that
ties in what was written in the Qualifications section.
All decisions to modify or exclude data were in keeping with the
guidelines and standards set forth by the Professional Association
of Resume Writers (PARW). With this resume, you now have a powerful
tool that's well organized and filled with pertinent data, while
also being aesthetically pleasing.
It was a pleasure serving you, Adam. Best of luck in all your
future endeavors.
ResumeEdge Editor
Certified Professional Resume Writer (CPRW)
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