Creative Sample Resume for a Gymnast - Critique
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Sample Resume Critique
Dear Marguerite ~
As requested during our telephone conversation, I used the photograph
of your performance from the 1984 National Gymnastic Event in which
you won first place.
To balance the rest of the resume with the photo's vibrant look,
I chose a dark ivory color to replace the standard white.
On your photograph, I “floated” your name and the
tag “Personal Trainer.” At a glance, a hiring manager
can easily see your direction.
Directly beneath the photograph, I listed your specialties - “Strength
& Resistance Training, Flexibility, Cardiovascular Workouts,
etc.”
Because of your solid professional experience, I chose to list
that next, rather than your education.
In the Professional Experience section, I began each bulleted
sentence with the strongest action verb possible, while also revising
text for clarity, conciseness, and maximum impact.
For example: In your email to ResumeEdge, you wrote: “Worked
with athletes who were hoping to make the cut for the Olympics.
Trained mostly those students who were talented in gymnastics and
weight lifting. Assisted Mr. Karansky, my employer and owner of
the training center, with those athletes.”
I revised and condensed that to read:
- Assisted Mr. Karansky in preparing Olympic hopefuls for the
gymnastics and weightlifting events.
This revision is to-the-point and presents your data in a professional
manner - exactly what hiring managers want.
I next listed your Education, placing both degrees beneath the
single heading of “California State University.”
The resume ends with your contact data. You'll notice your phone
number is larger than your physical address. The reason for this
is that hiring managers generally contact you by phone first, email
second, and rarely, if ever, snail mail. Therefore, the increased
font size makes the data easier to read and far more accessible.
During our phone conversation, you also made mention that you
might want to use your resume as a flyer to increase your client
list. Keeping that in mind, I designed the final document so that
it could be used as a resume or as marketing material.
All decisions to modify data were in keeping with the guidelines
and standards set forth by the Professional Association of Resume
Writers (PARW).
With this resume you now have a powerful tool that's well organized
and filled with pertinent data, while also being aesthetically
compelling.
It was a pleasure serving you, Marguerite. Best of luck in all
your future endeavors.
ResumeEdge Editor
Certified Professional Resume Writer (CPRW)
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