Sample Resume for a Computer Science Internship - Critique
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About this Sample Resume Critique
In this sample resume critique, the certified professional resume writer at
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the process of creating the client's "after" resume from the client's "before" resume.
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both the "before" and "after"
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Sample Resume Critique
Hello Rick,
Given your desire to secure a summer internship, I chose a "Student"
template that is streamlined with a decidedly modern look, but
also emphasizes your academic background.
I began your new internship resume by organizing your contact
information so that it would be easy to locate, but would not visually
detract from your qualifications.
I chose a Profile, rather than an Objective. In an objective,
you're telling a hiring manager what you want; whereas in
a profile, you're explaining what you can do for the company. You're
making a powerful statement by placing a hiring manager's needs
above your own.
I next listed your Education, placing the information about your
elective sequence in Digital and Computer Science in a bulleted
format so that the information was more visually accessible to
an internship recruiter who is looking for someone with this background.
I also added the information about your membership in the Society
of Hispanic Engineers.
I then included a "Professional Experience" section, italicizing
your job titles so that this information would highlight the responsibilities
you have undertaken and the leadership that you have exhibited.
I also presented details about each position in bulleted lists
so that this information is more visually accessible for your audience.
I began each bullet point with the strongest action verb possible,
while also rewriting the text for conciseness and maximum impact.
For example, you wrote:
"Duties included interfacing with customers, managing, training
people, marketing, and a great deal of leadership."
I rewrote this information and organized it into multiple bullets,
which read:
- Provide customer service, including responding to and resolving
client concerns and complaints.
- Recruited, trained, and supervised employees.
- Marketed products to increase sales.
In another example, you wrote:
"Responsible for over all training, customers service, product
quality, shipping and receiving, and day to day operation."
I rewrote this information and organized it into multiple bullets,
which read:
- Oversee daily operations, including training and supervising
eight employees.
- Ensure product quality; complete daily shipping and receiving
paperwork.
I completed your resume by mentioning that you could supply references
at your recruiter's request.
All decisions to modify or exclude data were in keeping with the
guidelines and standards set forth by the Professional Association
of Resume Writers (PARW).
With your new internship resume, you now have a powerful tool
that showcases your skills and leadership abilities at a glance
while also being aesthetically pleasing.
It was a pleasure serving you, Rick. Good luck in all of your
future endeavors.
ResumeEdge Editor
Certified Professional Resume Writer (CPRW)
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